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Jonathan Byrd's avatar

I love the way the narrator lovingly objectifies and centers herself. It feels honest to the animal desire.

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NJ Fiction's avatar

You leave the greatest comments! *Sometimes a girl just wants to be a object that’s worshipped (by someone who loves and respects her 🤭)

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Jessica W's avatar

Oh! This is so good! I love the attention to detail: the curve of muscle while wearing heels, the warm scent of his body, the small talk, the 2 lovers united as one. Your writing strikes a chord in me every time; often I read your pieces twice to admire the gift of your craft. When I can feel the author’s words hit a nerve or quicken my heartbeat, that’s the style of writing that makes me love to read. The joy, pleasure, and love in this story feels palatable. You’ve knocked it outta the park, again!

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NJ Fiction's avatar

How incredibly kind Jessica! Thank you so much for reading. I’m honored that my writing has such a wonderful effect on you. Buckle up we’re just getting started.

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Okey Erinne's avatar

"If I think too hard about tonight I will shatter into pieces of pleasure." My favorite line because I've been there over and over and I don't seem to know how to manage the heightened anticipation.

This piece is quite visceral: I can smell every scent, almost taste the champagne, and even feel the cold marble floor😃😃

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Thank you so much! The inability to manage the expectation or at least feel like you can’t is half the fun 🤣

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Ashleigh Vaughn's avatar

Ooooh spicy!!! I'm a lover girl and I've tried so hard to be a romance and erotica girlie but it just isn't for me though I'm a huge proponent of the real thing hahaha

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NJ Fiction's avatar

I have a sneaking suspicion you just haven’t found the right writer yet 🤭 I’m working on that

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Rachel Leeke Alexis's avatar

This made me squirm. The tension was palpable. This was so sexy!

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Thank you!!

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Robert the contemplative's avatar

whew you wrote this. it was the champagne for me. this was my first time I think intentionally reading erotic romance and loved it

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NJ Fiction's avatar

How delightful thank you for reading. If you liked it you might need it check out “how to pray with your lovers body” it was the first I wrote and really well received.

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Robert the contemplative's avatar

yeah I've read romance and erotic scenes before but it's the first time I can recall intentionally reading the genre.

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Excellent writing, and I promise you that I would have felt something stirring if that were still a thing I cared about.

Is it OK to say instead that I have the hots for the prose style?

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Bahahaha! Totally okay to say

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Shondra Bowie's avatar

NJ, I do not read romance/erotica normally, but I love your writing. My favourite line is “If I think too hard about tonight I will shatter into pieces of pleasure.” ⚡️

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NJ Fiction's avatar

This makes me very happy! It’s a genre more writers should read. They do suspense and description so well

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alex b.'s avatar

"He said, “I like what I worship to be visible.” Who am I to deny the worshipper his wants?"

I love that you called him the worshipper.

Ugghhh this is sexy!

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Thank you so much! That’s exactly what I was going for 🤭

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alex b.'s avatar

You're welcome💖

The first thing that came to mind is that this man is going NOWHERE. The way this woman takes care of him is not questioned. He undoubtedly loves every part of this woman.

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Boho Shaz's avatar

Nice, & so gooood!

This is my favourite line:

'I am building density, marble cooling, every pore expanding, collapsing into myself—outward—a thousand explosions of matter being worshipped.'

Space time and the universe, matter and worship -- erotic and beautiful all at once.

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Just like the creation of the universe! Thank you for reading 🖤

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Stanley Fritz's avatar

This was straight up HEAT!!! Yoooooooooooo

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Nũnũ's avatar

The line I enjoyed "There is a reverence for the space on my chest, beneath my chin, along my collarbone. He said, “I like what I worship to be visible.”

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Woohooo I loved writing that!! Like uh huh the body IS the temple

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Deirdre Lewis's avatar

So good! I’m glad you did.

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Deirdre Lewis's avatar

Okay that's a yes for me.

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NJ Fiction's avatar

🫣🫣 thank you!! I was actually a little nervous pressing publish on this one

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