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Sean Thomas McDonnell's avatar

NJ, I think you're one of the best writers here; your flow is captivating.

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NJ Fiction's avatar

My eyes opened so wide reading this 🥹 don’t make me weep!!

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Stanley Fritz's avatar

Hard agree

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EJ Trask's avatar

i love the contrast of the futuristic setting with the same heartbreaks and jealousies of any human era. fantastic.

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Thank you so much. Humans will human

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Deirdre Lewis's avatar

I loved the futuristic tone of this story and the details are incredible. Three chin hairs on a pre-menopausal woman. (!!!)

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NJ Fiction's avatar

I wasn’t sure if it would be offensive or funny which means I had to use it! 😋 thanks for reading

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Deirdre Lewis's avatar

It’s both that’s why it’s so fantastic!😂

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Author Michele Bardsley's avatar

This gave me chills. It's so beautifully written.

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Marc Typo's avatar

What can’t you write family. Future laureate pending.

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NJ Fiction's avatar

From your lips to God’s ears!!!

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Stanley Fritz's avatar

I was gone for a minute but now I’m back and instantly obsessed with your stories and the way you weave words. I loved this story and the protagonist who I read as hurt, processing, unhinged and chaotic. How did you even think to create this world?! 😭😭

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Welcome back! Well it all started at 1am this morning when I was watching an episode of Smallville and thinking about the truth and a future where people only thought in terms of truths but how even that would be twisted and then it just wrote itself (with a little research on looms and weaving )

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Stanley Fritz's avatar

I really love your writing and your mind. Bravo!

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Thank you!!!

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Jon T's avatar

I got warm with pleasure too. Truth. I love the rhythm of your language in this piece. It was kinda like getting slapped around a little. Need to take a breather before i catch up on your archive

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NJ Fiction's avatar

Thank you! I tried to make the pace match the mindset of the protagonist. So happy it landed well. Appreciate you reading (and hope you enjoy the archive when you make your way there.)

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