Excellent story with superb prose style. Since you ask about this, I do feel the ending is a touch obvious, not the buildup to it which is brilliantly handled, but the possessing spirit actually telling us at the end that it has possessed her body.
We've spoken about this before and you know my feeling on clear indications as to central themes vs hints of same, and of course there's no clear answer or rule, only preferences.
But I would almost bet that a version in which we change to a third-person vision of the spirit possessing its new body, unfamiliar with its particularities, would be creepier and give the reader more thrill of coming to recognise the truth.
But that's just my answer to your question, others may well feel different.
Excellent story with superb prose style. Since you ask about this, I do feel the ending is a touch obvious, not the buildup to it which is brilliantly handled, but the possessing spirit actually telling us at the end that it has possessed her body.
We've spoken about this before and you know my feeling on clear indications as to central themes vs hints of same, and of course there's no clear answer or rule, only preferences.
But I would almost bet that a version in which we change to a third-person vision of the spirit possessing its new body, unfamiliar with its particularities, would be creepier and give the reader more thrill of coming to recognise the truth.
But that's just my answer to your question, others may well feel different.
In any case, a wonderful story!
Thank you and your honest, kind opinion is appreciated
Of course I'd welcome your thoughts or critiques on my work too... Goes both ways!
For sure. I haven’t forgotten 🙂↕️
Body snatching at its finest. Should have listened to mom.
Also you made me google osmium. Beautiful choice of word!
I love the way this story unfolded, like a dream within a dream.
Dream world but make it a mirror! 🙂↕️