So beautiful and vivid. The part where she bites the amniotic sac made me say "damn,: What a phenomenal woman. For some reason I love the fact that you included something so basic like gatorade. Without it, I would think this was set in some where far away, away from the touch of everything we know. This reminds me that there are powerful women all around us. In short, a man, could never lol.
Very lovely and lyrical, it could almost be the begining, the genesis, of a new owrld, and the narrator the creatrix got parthenogenetically creating all human life. If you ever plan to do a fable cycle, this is the perfect opening.
Now that youāve said it perhaps Iāll put it at the front end of the very collection I avoided working on to pen this piece! Perhaps my brain knew all along. Thank you for reading and for the compliments!
So many many great lines but this one jumped out at me today "You are no accident. You are the consequence of deliberate, repetitive, persistent, action. " The whole thing was so visual and visceral. I loved it.
So beautiful and vivid. The part where she bites the amniotic sac made me say "damn,: What a phenomenal woman. For some reason I love the fact that you included something so basic like gatorade. Without it, I would think this was set in some where far away, away from the touch of everything we know. This reminds me that there are powerful women all around us. In short, a man, could never lol.
Thank you!! Iām glad you enjoyed it. I spent a few days on this one so glad it landed for you. I also really like the amniotic sac bit š
Very lovely and lyrical, it could almost be the begining, the genesis, of a new owrld, and the narrator the creatrix got parthenogenetically creating all human life. If you ever plan to do a fable cycle, this is the perfect opening.
BTW Your voice is very soothing and rich.
Now that youāve said it perhaps Iāll put it at the front end of the very collection I avoided working on to pen this piece! Perhaps my brain knew all along. Thank you for reading and for the compliments!
Very welcome, and I look forward to seeing your collection when it's ready to read!
So many many great lines but this one jumped out at me today "You are no accident. You are the consequence of deliberate, repetitive, persistent, action. " The whole thing was so visual and visceral. I loved it.
Thank you so much! Iām glad it translated and landed as intended