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Andrew Robert Colom's avatar

This piece is feral in the best way. It pulls you into rhythm first, sound, sweat, bodies, until you’re moving inside it without realizing when consent turns into ceremony. The language is lush and hypnotic, almost narcotic, and the second-person voice makes the intimacy unavoidable.

By the time the ritual reveals its true cost, it feels earned, mythic, and strangely reverent rather than shocking for shock’s sake. The final image is unforgettable, beautiful, horrifying, tender, and it lingered with me long after I finished reading. I like the birthing parallel hints.

I had to listen after reading it...love the effects and the performance of the voiceover. i don't know if i want to join this cult but the writing makes it feel so enticing...lol.

Tabitha Grace's avatar

Liiiiissssennn…I almost skipped the voiceover but I KNEW it would have been a great injustice. So I listened and I read along and it was EVERYTHING. First of all, I love the way you said The Macha Man howls…..

I loved the flow of the story from start to finish. I was only confused once, but then I read the line back and realized your genius with poetic phrasing.

I knew something gruesome would happen because I know your writing, but it was so effortless in how it came it; it was as sickening and sweet as the story itself.

I would love for you to feature The Macha Man in another one of these. I feel like he has a WHOLE lotta rituals up his sleeve and under his skin.

Fantastic job!

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